Re:My very first fanfic!

[Oldbushie]

Nice wrap up!

Just close enough to the game to preserve continuity, but with plenty of added depth I never thought about before. I always did wonder about that sudden proposal of Edgar's...

[Akril]

Beautiful, beautiful. Incredibly well written, with a lot of insight into Edgar's thoughts.

I'm also flattered to hear that this story was inspired by one of mine, but it stands on its own quite nicely.

I never thought of Genesta being in the position to know who Edgar was and that he was wrongfully imprisoned...the mention of that spell Lolotte cast put a stopper in that plot hole perfectly.

And here I thought that you didn't like our little Fae friend...


Akril

[Oldbushie]

Storm loves a faerie, Storm loves a faerie...

He is kind of interesting, though, yet there's not much really known about him...

[Rosedragon]

I just got through playing KQ4. I love this story, it's so close to the game. I like Edgar too. Hmm, maybe I should post some of my fanfics. I think I'll put them on my website and then post a link to my website. Yeah, that's the best thing to do.

[Storm]

Thanks Dragonstar!! Nice to see you around here again  

Please post your fanfics/links to them here... it's getting a bit  lonely on this section  

[Oldbushie]

Hello again Dragonstar!!!!   Yes, we would love to read your fanfics.

[TakariFreak]

Aw, that was so cute storm!  We need more Edgar fans around here!  We should make a petition:  Saving Prince Edgar!  

[Rosedragon]

I'm working on getting the library section of my website in shape but it will take some time. I'm taking a break for the holidays. I might just post some of my fanfics here. Go to Sierra's website and checkout there community section, they have a place for king's quest fanfiction.

[TakariFreak]

Dragonstar - you should just create a cheesy yahoo page with all your fanfic stuff...it'd be easier to find that way...

[Louisiana Night]

I liked it!

You said to be brutally honest, so I'll try.

I think it needs to be gone over, just to fix a few of the rough edges(example= though instead of thought). That and the slight clashing of writing styles(it might just be, that the KQ4 parts, stand out in my mind). Using similar dialog, that you wrote, might have been a better idea(IMHO, I'm sure others would disagree).

I thought it was GREAT though. Have you written anything else(KQ or not, that you have, or are willing to post)?

P.S. My only real complaint, is your link. lol

[rosellafan]

WOW, great story Storm!!!  Takes the whole thing and gives it to us from a whole new perspective, and Edgar NEVER gets any play.  Keep up the great narrative style!  

[Storm]

Thanks LN & rosellafan!! Glad you liked it

And thanks for the criticism, LN... Not brutal enough though

I used the original game dialogue because I wanted the story to look more like something that went on 'behind the scenes' of KQ4, rather than a novelization of the game... no doubt Roberta's style clashes with my (total lack of) style

Have you written anything else(KQ or not, that you have, or are willing to post)?

I don't write all that much... and not at all lately. I think my 'very first fanfic' would remain my only one, as I have no intention of writing anything else like that, ever, as long as I live and breathe. One is bad enough
The rest of what I do have, is either incomplete, too long, in Hebrew, or that I just wouldn't publish (probably all of the above)

P.S. My only real complaint, is your link.

Sorry, that link was alive and well when I posted it... blame it on Yonkey for taking the archive off the board

[Yonkey]

Sorry, that link was alive and well when I posted it... blame it on Yonkey for taking the archive off the board

They'll be back when we upgrade.  We just removed them from the index page cuz it was making the page way too long.  

[Storm]

Hear that, LN? Just wait for the update... being on the web team, you're in a better position to know when it will be. Come to think of it, why hasn't Yonkey given you the key to the archives already?

[Yonkey]

Come to think of it, why hasn't Yonkey given you the key to the archives already?

There is no key.  Only moderators of those forums can see them (i.e. Say and myself)

[Shadowfax]

Well, I don't care what anyone else says; I enjoyed reading it and so therefore it is a good story!  

[Storm]

Thanks!
I thought it wouldn't be dark enough for your liking

I'm actually amazed people are reading this... I just noticed how incredibly long-winded it is
And that's the abridged version you're reading - I didn't add many of the things I wanted to add precisly because I was afraid it would turn out too long (or too dumb) and I'd never finish it

[Louisiana Night]

long-winded?

I thought it was rather short, and that's one of the reasons I liked it. I was able to read it all at one time, and as some authors have said, get the full effect.

[Shadowfax]

Thanks!
I thought it wouldn't be dark enough for your liking

I'm actually amazed people are reading this... I just noticed how incredibly long-winded it is
And that's the abridged version you're reading - I didn't add many of the things I wanted to add precisly because I was afraid it would turn out too long (or too dumb) and I'd never finish it

First of all,

A) Whilst I do admit the darker the work the better, I am still capable of enjoying short stories which are cheap and cheerful and to the point! (The dark stuff I write is absolutely horrific, you thought "A Clockwork Orange" was bad...think again when you read some of the things I have written.)

B) Your story is not long winded! (I never write short stories because I cannot fit in all my ideas. Besides that, I need lots of plot development and I use very, very long sentances with exceedingly complex word structures most of the time.)